For my first quote I added “the Effective Altruism states that…” I also explained more about what the quote is saying to give the reader a better understanding.
For my second quote I added a totally new one and talked about Peter Singer and his opinions on art and how they are similar to the EAs. I gave more information about Singer and added a quote that he said.
Before: Artists do not contribute to the people in need and don’t help the suffering. There main idea is “that the only good that counts is what you accomplish over and above what the next person would have done in your place.”
After: Artists do not contribute to the people in need and don’t help the suffering. The Effective Altruism states that “the only good that counts is what you accomplish over and above what the next person would have done in your place.” Meaning that if you are the best of the best and the one making a lot of money and donating that money to the greater good then you are doing what you are supposed to.
Before: The Effective Altruism is a group of people who “want to reduce suffering and increase lifespan and happiness.” They believe that people who spend their time creating art are not making an impact in the world and don’t make enough money to feed the homeless therefore it is not worth pursuing.
After: The Effective Altruism believes that people who spend their time creating art are not making an impact on the world and don’t make enough money to feed the homeless therefore it is not worth pursuing. The Effective Altruism is not the only group of people that share these beliefs. An philosopher named Peter Singer published essay that states, “Suppose you saw a child drowning in a pond, would you jump in and rescue her even if you hadn’t pushed her in? Even if it meant ruining your clothes? It would be highly controversial to say “no”- and yet most of us manage to ignore those dying of poverty and preventable disease surround us.”
