Your paper has some really nice ideas and you seem to know where you want to take your paper. You’re introduction paragraph is well written and I specifically like the sentence in that paragraph when you said, “There is no set definition of beauty, it is one of the few things in this world where the idea of beauty fluctuates so much because of each person’s unique definition and idea of what beauty truly is.” This is very true and you couldn’t have worded this better. When you added quotes from Armstrong you expanded off his quote and used your own words to make it more clear which is really great to do. On your second page you added your opinions and ideas but I think you should expand more on your thoughts. Talk about what you specifically think is beautiful to you and add some pictures. To make your paper longer I would add a quote from Schiller when you talk about him on the bottom of your second page. Also don’t forget to add a classmates project “Let’s Talk About Art” and connect it to your essay and opinions and add more pictures and hyperlinks. Overall your paper is coming out very well and it has a lot of penitential.
