My goals for my final draft is to make a stronger connection for my thesis and be more clear about what I am going to be talking about in my overall paper. In my essay I mentioned some benefits that art has for people but I should also tie in on how the world would be different or bad without art.
Some steps I plan to achieve this goal is to go back to my paper and get rid of some repetitive information I added and talk more about the bigger picture of my essay. I will look back and try to make my beliefs stronger and try to make my paper have a better flow. I will go back and break up some of my paragraphs because some are too long. In my conclusion I’m going to try to make it shorter and just try to sum up the main topic of my paper.
My biggest challenge is going to be just changing up a lot of my essay. The peer review was very helpful and it made me realize how much I can make my paper better. I need to get rid of some information and add better and more in supportive details. Another challenge I am going to run into is giving more information about Southans opinions on art. I don’t have any challenges talking about the Ted Talk but the article that Southan wrote he mostly talks about the EAs opinions and he doesn’t add much about his own. I’m going to need to break down his paper and look for better key ideas to add in my own paper that he talks about.
If a challenge comes up that is too difficult for me to solve on my own I could go back and read through the book “They said, I said” and look for some helpful ideas they give. Another idea if I am stuck is I can email the students that peer reviewed my essay and ask for their opinions.
